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Descriptions. Everyone loves adjectives and adverbs--they make our job easy. "The bright light lit up the dark, cold room." Yet you always hear from professionals to avoid those adjectives/adverbs like the plague. But if you do, how can you still describe your scenes? How can you still form that image in the reader's head? How do you write without boring descriptions?
This is amazing advice from an English teacher I know. He told me to search up Shooting an Elephant by George Orwell and study it. Peruse and analyze how come we can see and feel the scene so intimately when few adjectives/adverbs are used.
The answer? Verbs.
Take this passage from the short story, for example:
It's not the descriptions that make us feel the scene. Rather, it's the verbs. "...jolt his whole body, knock the last remand of strength..." I don't know about you, but when I read that line, I can see the elephant jolting, knocking away strength. Verbs have the power we often underestimate, and it's that power that breathes life into the most persuading and graphic descriptions.
Let me show you what I mean:
Here's the sentence I showed you above. "The bright light lit up the dark, cold room."
What you can change: The [bright] piercing light lit up the [dark, cold] shadows creeping on the iciness of the room."
So now, you have: "The piercing light lit up the shadows creeping on the iciness of the room."
Easy, right? But there's more you can do.
Stronger, more powerful verbs.
See: The [piercing] glaring light [lit] spilled across the shadows [creeping] slashing the iciness of the room.
The end product?
The glaring light spilled across the shadows, slashing the iciness of the room.
Much better, no? And you use this with any type of scene, too. Whether it's romantic, suspenseful, lighthearted, etc. Sometimes, you'll have to add in more words (like I did), and that's totally fine. Same thing if you find it necessary to cut words--whatever works.
But, sometimes you just have to leave a sentence/description the way it is. To edit every line like this would be insane! Or should I say, appalling?
What do YOU think about verbs?